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Having a Low Price Vacation abroad

People may think traveling abroad costs lots of money,but actually there’s some simple ways to save money.First,you can take low cost flights abroad.Because lacking of extra service,like meals and boarding announcements,it’s cheaper.Or you can order you plane tickets a few months earlier.The ticket’s price has a big range between travel seasons and off-seasons.Second,you can stay at YH hotels.It’s a general and convenient choice for backpackers but you should have its member card.Every countries have its own rules and prices for appling a YH card, and some countries even have lower price than Taiwan.However,you may have to live with strangers in YH hotels.By the time,you should prepare a strong lock to keep your money save.Third,if you get a room in YH hotel successfully,you’ll find there’s a kitchen overthere.Buy yourself some easy cooking foods (這裡被打了個問號 ) and do it yourself.In some high living standard countries,like England,one meal in a gerneral restaurant can let you stay one more day with your DIY meals.If you’re not a good cook,instant noodle is a good idea,too.Fourth,moving by your feet and public transportation. It’s healthier and funnier to enjoy the trip but you should have your ways planned. Last, if you don’t care about where to go and just want to go abroad, you can choose countries where the living standard is not high. Although the hotels may not be so comfortable and the foods may not be so delicate, it’s a different experience without spending much money.

conclusion sentence disappear!! XD

六十分 = =

因為知道自己英文寫作從高中開始就一直很爛...所以好像也不意外

徐媽媽說support的ideas很好, 但detail 並沒有好好的develop

導致整篇文章偏離主題 唉呀 (倒)

也就是說整個文章的架構都有問題 嗚嗚, 而且逗點後面忘記空一格, 而且寫錯好多字, 而且被劃掉好多句 = =

而且忘記寫conclusion sentence!! X! 吼這樣到底要怎麼改 QQ

被他一說完整個很不想把第二篇narrative的故事交出去...因為那也是臨時趕工出來的 寫得比這篇心虛 唉呀!!

唉唷...有預感要被當了~"~ 徐媽媽好可怕